I’ve been participating in pitch madness #pitmad on twitter, which would only logically lead to query madness. It’s pretty tough to sum up a book in 140 characters, especially when you write a fairly complex epic fantasy, but it was fun. I think. Are headaches fun?
Anyway, the fabulous Michelle Hauck is hosting a Holiday Query Blog Hop. Queriers post their queries then link them on her site. They then critique the five above them and the five below them. It should be fun. http://michelle4laughs.blogspot.com/2014/12/holiday-query-blog-hop.html
So, here is the query for Far Rider, my epic fantasy. It’s over the ideal 250 words, but it’s one page. Hopefully agents will overlook the extra words.
They say bad news rides a fast horse. Kaelyn Diarmand’s bad news came on a dead horse ridden by her equally dead M’Eiryn uncle.
The M’Eiryn are warrior horse masters–barbarians, invited to settle in Tamarland after they helped the king defeat the demon armies. Her mother’s people are “civilized” and settled, building great cities and learning centers. Kaelyn is neither barbarian nor civilized, caught somewhere in between and belonging nowhere.
She should have been a Far Rider, a courier in the elite M’Eiryn cavalry, like her father. With the king missing and her dead uncle blamed for it, a bloody civil war that will destroy the M’Eiryn looms and Far Riders are never more needed. However, her mother concocts a wild scheme to keep Kaelyn out of the Far Riders that almost gets her killed and exposes her to a returned demon lord. The demon now wants to destroy her before she reveals him to the world. What’s worse, a handsome privateer wants to use her to disgrace his heroic father and she’s not at all immune to his charms. A senile sorcerer wants to…well, who knows for sure? He’s senile.
With her very survival at stake, she sneaks into the fledgling, and disdained, women’s unit of the military to learn how to fight. Then, perhaps, she can become a Far Rider and help save the M’Eiryn, even if it means going to war against her mother’s people.
Far Rider is an epic fantasy with series potential, complete at 145,000 words. I’m a huge proponent of Joss Whedon’s advice, “Make it dark, make it grim, make it tough, but then, for the love of God, tell a joke.”
I was a lead writer for Speedhorse Racing Report, a weekly horse racing magazine, for twenty-three years where I wrote race and human interest stories. I’m now with Raincrow Studios, an indie game developer specializing in games with a strong, fantasy narrative. I also raised Quarter Horses for years and I’m from a ranching background, so the horse details are authentic.
Thank you for your time and consideration,