Well, the title says it all, or doesn’t in this case. I need a new title for Paladin’s Pride.
The following is the query letter I am working on. Yes, I am still working on it, but not really. Since I’m taking it to Surrey for a workshop, it’s less immediate than some other things.
Dear Perfect Agent,
(Personal note about why agent is being approached.)
Gentyl longs to join her aunt’s elite cavalry, but with a bloody civil war and genocide looming, it’s a dream that could get her killed.
One hero in the family is enough and, unlike her famous aunt, Gentyl isn’t the heroic type. She just wants to be a courier, but even that is a struggle as she fights prejudice and hatred in the military unit she enters against her family’s wishes.
With the king missing, allies who once joined forces to defeat the demon armies thirty years ago are now poised to destroy each other; just as the demon lord and his caller Lucine have planned. Gentyl and a supposedly senile wizard, with a penchant for botching spells, irritating nobles and livening things up with fireworks, stand between them and the destruction of the alliance and her people.
Gentyl and the wizard join forces to unravel the mystery of dead guards in hopes of finding the missing king and preventing war in this 120,000-word epic fantasy.
I was a staff writer for Speedhorse magazine seventeen years and I’ve owned and raised Quarter Horses for years. This gives the horse aspects of the story a firm foundation.
Please find enclosed the first five pages and a synopsis.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Any suggestions? What else do you need to see to come up with a title?
Some other ones:
Gentle Spirit, Warrior Soul
Paladins All-Taking this out of the running. It’s going on the last book, because they put that sign over the cemetery.
Knight’s Blood In the prologue, which will most likely become a middle chapter now, Aegis is killed. As he is dying, he focuses on a knight’s blood apple blossom, floating in a pool of his blood. Knight’s blood apple blossoms have a special meaning.
Blood born, blood sworn is a ritual for the M’eiryn people.
Far Rider’s Dream
Don’t want to confuse this with Britain’s Rider series.
When Demons Sing
Don’t want to confuse it with any of the vampire demon glut.
This might actually be a good title for the series.
Though I Should Die
On the tombstone of a Sylvan champion is this inscription, denoting the grave is consecrated and protected by a spirit warrior. “Though I Should Die, Yet Will I Serve.” This has special meaning to Gen who more than anything wants to prove she is loyal and skilled.
And In The Tear A Rainbow
This line is in the book from a scene where she is at a grave, crying over a fallen warrior.
GENTYL AND THE DEMON CALLER-Steve Stubbs
Obviously, I haven’t made a decision. sigh