Well, once again the weekend is nearly over.
I spent most of it writing and didn’t get nearly enough done.
We’re working on characterization and POV in the workshop. I messed up the assignment, but I was glad to see most of my characters are fairly developed and multi-dimensional. That’s a good sign. I was dismayed to realize some had no descriptions to speak of. I must rectify that immediately.
My biggest frustration is wanting to write fulltime. I don’t even want to be rich and famous, just let me write for a living. Someday.
Here is one of the scenes that describes Captain Dorion.
Captain Dorion Description. (He is questioning Avriel, one of the female recruits, about a brawl in their barracks the night before. The women have banded together to hide the truth and keep Gen safe. )
“You see, sir, it was a matter of honor,” Avriel said. “We were discussing who was the most handsome man in the compound and I, of course, said it had to be you.”
Dorion dropped his arm from her shoulders. There were more than a few muffled giggles. “Of course, you did, Blackstone.”
Captain Dorion had never been a handsome man, even when the bloom of youth was upon him. Now, after years of fighting, he was as craggy as the mountains to the north. His thinning hair was a deep, smoky gray shot with silver. His hands were large and wide, calloused from wielding the sword he loved and ink-stained from wielding the quill he hated. His chest was barrel-shape as were his bowed legs. He resembled, for the most part, one of the wild, shaggy little mountain bulls, who were nearly as wide as they were tall and always mad. The personality especially suited him.
She looked at him with some remorse. “Unfortunately, some of the others felt others were more handsome and I had to defend your honor.”
Benning almost smiled. Jeremy choked on a barely swallowed laugh.
Dorion resumed his pacing. After a long, uncomfortable silence, he stopped once again and turned to face them. “Blackstone, that has to be the most audacious lie I have ever heard in my life and I’m not swallowing it for one moment.”
“Oh, sir, I assure you, I wouldn’t lie to you.”
“Of course, you would. I don’t believe there is a woman among you who thinks anyone is more handsome than me. But, your gallantry earned you all breakfast before you get the stuffing beat out of you.”